pinus sylvestris
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Velodog2
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Re: pinus sylvestris
Very nice! I like the direction you are taking this in. I like the lower trunk and first branch that echo each others shapes. I think it would benefit if you could introduce more movement into the upper half of the trunk though. The branch structure also appears a bit confusing up there in the picture at least, but I'm sure you will sort that out in time. I love Scots pines.
Velodog2- Member
pinus sylvestris
Hello Wog. Thanks for posting your Pine. What is your change of angle? Is it the base your talking about thickening? Theres a branch just below the apex on the right side, that drops down at 45 degrees. Its very straight and does'nt fit in with the rest of the tree.
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Re: pinus sylvestris
When ever I decide to make a post on this site I am always hindered by the question; "Who am I to make suggestions"? Having said that there are two problems that I see which I think you are going to have to deal with sooner or latter.
The first is the impression of an inverse taper. This might be resolved by selecting a new front. rotating the tree to a section where trunk does not give that appearance. The second, and related to the first I think, is the sling shot formation where the trunk divides in two. This location, is giving the impression of an inverse taper by creating a point where an upper portion of the trunk seems greater than the base.
There are some far more artistic eyes on this site than mine who might be able to give you some really creative ideas on how to resolve this tree, but from what I see I think you might have to re think the design direction you are now going if this tree is going to be the world class tree I believe it can be. I hope I have not offended you, and if I am wrong about all of this I welcome the explanation of why; because I am still learning.
The first is the impression of an inverse taper. This might be resolved by selecting a new front. rotating the tree to a section where trunk does not give that appearance. The second, and related to the first I think, is the sling shot formation where the trunk divides in two. This location, is giving the impression of an inverse taper by creating a point where an upper portion of the trunk seems greater than the base.
There are some far more artistic eyes on this site than mine who might be able to give you some really creative ideas on how to resolve this tree, but from what I see I think you might have to re think the design direction you are now going if this tree is going to be the world class tree I believe it can be. I hope I have not offended you, and if I am wrong about all of this I welcome the explanation of why; because I am still learning.
Vance Wood- Member
Re: pinus sylvestris
Vance Wood wrote:When ever I decide to make a post on this site I am always hindered by the question; "Who am I to make suggestions"? (...)
I agree with Vance on the tree, and I feel the same for the rest also
Vance Wood wrote:(...) because I am still learning.
This may not be very original, but I think the lower branch on the left could go. Making a shari there would reduce the inverse taper in time. If you cut it out, this would leave you with a good base for a literati : you could then twist the top enough for the branch on the right to be the first branch on the left, and thus add more movement in the top. Not sure if I make me understand...
Off-topic : you know I went to Dzierżoniów in 1985, to visit for the first and last time in my life some relatives on my father's side. I'd like to take my sons in the region, and in Zakopane one day... "Pi, Pi, kollega pi.... (Sorry, Tony's Artworks have put me in a very playful mood tonight...)
AlainK- Member
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I agree with making this into a Literati. The movement in the trunk seems to fit more to this style and the reduction at the junction of the two conflicting branches may reduce the reverse taper but I would still like to hear what Pavel has to say about the tree if he cares to post. He seems to have a really great eye for this species and difficult choices.
Vance Wood- Member
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Hi. I’m not offended if someone is giving a creative and wise advice.A change of the front is not gonna help I think. I still work on nebari, I’m planning to make Shari where there is a callus, furthermore impression of thickening of the trunk can cause this jin which juts on the fork of the trunk and left lower branch. I’m not planning to lead the tree into a Bunjin style.
AlainK, Dzierżoniów has changed a lot since 1985, so you’re invited TO visit the city and neighbouring mountains.
AlainK, Dzierżoniów has changed a lot since 1985, so you’re invited TO visit the city and neighbouring mountains.
WOG- Member
Re: pinus sylvestris
Hello Wog,
Very nice tree and with a lot of future.
I think that my ideas can help to improve your pine.
what do you think of shorten the second jin on the lower part of the trunk.
Open up the upper part to show more trunk.
Shorten the left branch and make it compacter.
Your tree has great movement show that.
Regards,
Rakesh
Very nice tree and with a lot of future.
I think that my ideas can help to improve your pine.
what do you think of shorten the second jin on the lower part of the trunk.
Open up the upper part to show more trunk.
Shorten the left branch and make it compacter.
Your tree has great movement show that.
Regards,
Rakesh
Rakesh- Member
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