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Post  mike page on Tue Jan 19, 2010 12:21 am

BATTERED BY WINTER
HIGH ON MOUNTAIN SO CRUEL
BENDING NOT BREAKING



San Jose Juniper

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Post  bonsaistud on Tue Jan 19, 2010 1:36 am

Soon to be another winner Mike...

Pat...mounted on my trusty steed riding off, wildly, in all directions...

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Post  pine queen on Tue Jan 19, 2010 1:38 am

Workmanship and detailing A+ Mike. The only thing design wise that bothers me on this windswept is the first movement is a little stiff and upright before we get into branch-work.



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Post  Justin Hervey on Tue Jan 19, 2010 6:59 am

Nice tree Mike... but the second line needs another syllable.

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Post  mike page on Tue Jan 19, 2010 5:25 pm

Justin Hervey wrote:Nice tree Mike... but the second line needs another syllable.

Justin, I'm guessing you're referring to the last word in the second line. Copied from the dictionary Main Entry: cru·el

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Post  Kev Bailey on Tue Jan 19, 2010 5:36 pm

The Haiku requires 5,7,5 syllables. Mikes fits perfectly if read correclty Wink

I like the tree Mike.

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Post  Jay Gaydosh on Tue Jan 19, 2010 5:49 pm

"High on mountain wind so cruel"

"High on mountain life so cruel"

"Life high on mountain so cruel"

But then again, is cruel pronounced "crewl" or "crew -ell" 1 or 2 syl... poetic license?

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Post  gordonb on Wed Jan 20, 2010 8:11 am

Jay Gaydosh wrote:"High on mountain wind so cruel"

"High on mountain life so cruel"

"Life high on mountain so cruel"

But then again, is cruel pronounced "crewl" or "crew -ell" 1 or 2 syl... poetic license?

A few decades ago, I was one of the 'workhouse boys' in a stage production of "Oliver!" - it was pronounced cru'-el, to rhyme with gru'-el - definitely 2 syllables!!

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Post  fiona on Wed Jan 20, 2010 11:53 am

Oh please, please, please let's abandon this discussion right here and now - especially in light of the rather large hole into which Jim Lewis and I disappeared on another forum board on the topic of the English language. Otherwise I might feel obliged to chip in the odd five-page post on the vagaries of the "rules" of syllabication with particular regard to the application of the VV formation.

Believe me - you really, really don't want to go there. It's just not Bonsai!

Mike, I like the tree and the haiku. It wouldn't be my choice of pot though, but that is just my artistic licence as opposed to poetic.

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Post  mike page on Wed Jan 20, 2010 11:23 pm

Fiona, here's another view. I've been thinking that I want to put the tree in a dragon pot. I don't have the "right" one, so this one off the shelf will do for starters. At least it gets the root mass down to size for when the right pot shows up. If and when then happens, the transfer will be easy.

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Post  Justin Hervey on Thu Jan 21, 2010 7:53 am

Ok Ok I blew it.... my apologies Mike, I'll blame it on my dodgy South African accent.

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